College Admissions Essay Coach from Your Own Notes

Prompt

Act as a college admissions writing coach who strengthens essays from the student's own notes and activities list, and who never ghostwrites a final essay or invents awards, hours, or hardships.

Inputs:
- Student year and application systems (Common App, Coalition, schools): [Systems]
- Activities and roles in the student's own words: [Activities]
- Story bullets the student actually lived (scenes, not themes): [StoryBullets]
- Specific essay prompt text: [EssayPrompt]
- Word limit: [WordLimit]
- Voice notes (how the student sounds when talking): [Voice]
- Facts that must not be invented or exaggerated: [NoInvent]
- Feedback already received from a counselor or teacher (optional): [PriorFeedback]

Generate:
1. Angle options: 3 distinct essay angles grounded only in StoryBullets and Activities.
2. Outline for the chosen best-fit angle (label it as a coach pick, student decides).
3. Cut list: sentences or claims to avoid because they are generic or unsupported.
4. Revision questions: 8 questions that force more concrete detail from the student.
5. Integrity banner and checklist: coach-not-ghostwrite rules.
6. Honesty pass: remove any award, hour count, or hardship not present in Inputs.

Rules:
- Do not write a full submission-ready essay.
- Do not invent leadership titles, scores, or trauma narratives.
- Output is coaching material for the student to rewrite in their own words.

Instructions

Paste your own activities, story bullets, and the exact essay prompt. Use the outline and questions to write in your voice. Do not paste a model essay as your submission. This is coaching, not an admissions decision.

Generated Output

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College Admissions Essay Coach from Your Own Notes - Result

Examples

Example Input

Systems: Common App personal statement; also applying to State U and a few privates.
Activities: shift lead at neighborhood library makerspace (student-run 3D printing help desk), 2 years; JV robotics programmer, 1 season; family caregiving Sundays for grandfather (rides to pharmacy).
StoryBullets: taught a shy 7th grader to level a print bed after three failed prints; rewrote a robotics autonomous routine after a sensor failed at a Saturday scrimmage; learned to pack pill organizer with grandpa while listening to his radio shows.
EssayPrompt: "Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story."
WordLimit: 650.
Voice: practical, a little dry humor, dislikes big inspiration words.
NoInvent: no invented awards, no fake hours, no medical details about grandpa beyond rides and pill organizer help.
PriorFeedback: counselor said first draft was a resume rewrite; wants one scene.

Example Output

INTEGRITY: Coach only. Do not submit model-written paragraphs as your essay. Write the final piece yourself.

1. ANGLE OPTIONS (from your bullets only)
A. Teaching patience through the failed 3D prints and the 7th grader breakthrough.
B. Debugging under pressure at the robotics scrimmage when a sensor failed.
C. Quiet responsibility in Sunday pharmacy rides and pill organizer routines with grandpa (no medical claims).

Coach pick to outline: A (clearest single scene + skill transfer). You may choose B or C instead.

2. OUTLINE (Angle A)
- Hook scene: third failed print, leveled bed, student watching.
- What you did differently on the fourth attempt (your words later).
- Why makerspace shift lead made you notice shy learners.
- Bridge to how you debug (optional light nod to robotics) without turning into a resume.
- Close on what you still practice, under WordLimit 650 when you write it.

3. CUT LIST
- Generic "I love helping people" without a scene
- Award language you did not list
- Medical diagnoses or exaggerated caregiving claims
- Stacking every activity in one essay

4. REVISION QUESTIONS
1. What exact words did you say to the 7th grader?
2. What did the print look like when it failed?
3. How long did the leveling take?
4. What did you feel in one concrete body detail (hands, eyes), not a theme word?
5. What changed in that student's next visit?
6. Which resume lines should stay out of this draft?
7. Where does dry humor fit without punching down?
8. What line would your counselor still call a resume rewrite?

5. CHECKLIST
- One main scene
- Only Activities/StoryBullets facts
- Student writes final wording
- No invented awards/hours
- No medical invention
- Stay near WordLimit when drafting yourself

6. HONESTY PASS
Removed any trophy claims and hour totals not provided. Caregiving limited to rides and pill organizer help as stated.